段落篇幅把控技巧
(1) 长短句的切换
根据多年教学经验，学生在初学写作时，往往句子都写不长，这使得文章读起来非常细碎。但是在有了一定的语法基础之后，又容易走到另一个极端——通篇都是长句。其实这两种情况都不可取：我们应该在长句中适当添加短句，以增加句式长短的丰富性。长短句的交替会增加文章的可读性，让长句变得更华丽，让短句变得更有力量。
例1：【长】Holding the trumpet firmly, he seemed to see Louis’s eyes sparkling with happiness.【短】He made it!
翻译：他紧紧地握着小号，似乎看到Louis的眼睛里闪烁着幸福的光芒。他成功了！
例2：【长】Every night, as I lay there, I stared at the window and the curtains Ma made from empty flour sacks.【长】Sometimes the train stopped—for someone else's Pa coming home.【短】Not mine, not yet.
翻译：每天晚上，当我躺在那里的时候，我都会盯着窗户和妈妈用空面粉袋做的窗帘看。有时火车会停下来——让别人的爸爸回家。不是我的，我的还没有。
例3：【长】Wolf pups are shy and cautious, and I didn’t have much hope of tricking them outside.【短】But I had to try.【长】So I began copying the squeak of a mother wolf calling her young.【短】No response.
翻译：狼崽既害羞又谨慎，我没什么把握把它们引诱出来。但我不得不尝试一下。于是我开始模仿母狼叫幼崽的叫声。没有回应。
(2) 叙事节奏的切换
在时间跨度较大的事件中，为了避免因节奏太快而导致内容空洞，或者因节奏太慢而导致情节拖沓，我们要适时切换叙事的节奏，让文章在有限的篇幅内叙述足够的信息，同时详略有致。比如下面这个例子：
【极快】By 1928, I’d been wandering for nine years.【快】I met a woman named Elzenia.【快】We fell in love, married and moved to Dallas, where I got work fixing roads for the city.【慢】When Amelia, the oldest of our seven children, first went to school, I took my wife aside. “Elzenia,” I said, “I don’t want the kids to know I can’t read or write.”
情感细节类段落描写：
1. 激动与开心
Filled with delight, Ali walked home quickly. He could not wait to see his sister and share the thrilling news. On his arrival, Ali found his sister was waiting outside. “Lily, see what I have got for you.” He took the prize out of his bag with his trembling hands. The instant Lily saw the shoes, her face lit up，her eyes twinkling with excitement. So thrilled was she that she threw herself at Ali. “Thank you! Ali.” Tears of joy welled up their eyes as the brother and sister hugged tightly together，jumping up and down with excitement.
充满喜悦的阿里很快走回家。他迫不及待地想见到妹妹，分享这个激动人心的消息。到达后，阿里发现他的妹妹在外面等着。“莉莉，看看我给你准备了什么。”他颤抖着从包里掏出奖品。莉莉一看到鞋子，脸上立刻亮了起来，眼睛里闪烁着兴奋的光芒。她激动得扑向阿里。“谢谢你！阿里。”当兄妹俩紧紧地抱在一起，兴奋地上下跳跃时，喜悦的泪水夺眶而出。
2.宽慰与温暖
I took part in a cycling competition held in my school.What let me down was that I had difficulty keeping up with the other cyclists.I bit my lips and wiped the tears from my cheeks.Just at that time，my classmates clapped for me and cast an encouraging glance at me.Amazingly，a mixture of warmth and relief welled up in my deep heart(无灵主语句)．What made me relieved (what引导的主语从句) was that I finally finished the competition.Smiling in satisfaction，my teacher reached out his hands with his fingers forming a “heart”(with复合结构)，saying，“You are great.”
我参加了在我的学校举办的自行车比赛。使我失望的是我很难跟上其他骑自行车的人。我咬着嘴唇，擦去脸颊上的泪水。就在那时，我的同学们为我鼓起了掌，并向我投来鼓励的目光。令人惊奇的是，一种温暖和宽慰的感觉涌进了我的内心深处。使我松了一口气的是我终于完成了比赛。我的老师满意地笑着，伸出他的手，用他的手指比成一个“心”形，说：“你很棒。”
3.悲伤、沮丧和孤独
Everyone in the classroom was chatting happily while Jane sat alone, at a loss. An air of sorrow and loneliness settled over her. Feeling left out, Jane was getting desperate with loneliness. She rode home from school slowly, numb with sorrow. Then she locked herself in her room, abandoning herself to great sadness. She felt so sad that she found herself crying unconsciously, unable to hold back her tears. She wept quietly, feeling it was the saddest moment for her young life.
教室里的每个人都在愉快地聊天，而简一个人坐着，不知所措。悲伤和孤独的气氛笼罩着她。简感到被冷落了，感到孤独绝望。她从学校骑着马慢慢回家，悲伤得麻木了。然后她把自己锁在房间里，沉浸在巨大的悲伤中。她感到如此悲伤，以至于她发现自己不知不觉地哭了起来，忍不住流下了眼泪。她静静地哭着，觉得这是她年轻生命中最悲伤的时刻。
4. 生气和愤怒
Tom's recent behaviour made Mr Smith burst into anger. Finding his homework was unfinished again，Mr Smith let out a cry of anger, with his eyes shining with annoyance. His patience had worn thin, turning around and glaring at Tom, “You'd better explain what's going on！”However, Tom hung his head and said nothing, which made him frown. He pulled a long face in anger. Eventually, unable to contain his anger, he stormed out of the room, slamming the door furiously behind him.
汤姆最近的行为使史密斯先生勃然大怒。史密斯先生发现他的家庭作业又没做完，气得大叫一声，眼睛里满是烦恼。他的耐心已经消耗殆尽，转过身来怒视着汤姆：“你最好解释一下发生了什么事！”然而，汤姆低着头，什么也没说，这让他皱了眉头。他愤怒地拉长了脸。最后，他无法控制自己的愤怒，怒气冲冲地走出房间，身后猛烈地关上门。
动作类段落描写
1.The child ran towards the playground, his face glowing with excitement. He jumped onto the swing and started to swing back and forth, laughing happily. His legs kicked in the air, and his hair flew behind him. He felt like he was flying.
孩子跑向操场，脸上洋溢着兴奋的光芒。他跳上秋千，开始前后摆动，开心地笑着。他的腿在空中踢着，头发在身后飞扬。他感觉自己在飞翔。
2.She sat at the piano and placed her hands on the keys. She closed her eyes and took a deep breath. Then, she started to play, her fingers dancing across the keys. The music filled the room, and she lost herself in the melody.
她坐在钢琴前，把手放在琴键上。她闭上眼睛，深吸一口气。然后，她开始弹奏，她的手指在琴键上跳舞。音乐充满了房间，她沉浸在旋律中。
3.She walked slowly along the beach, her feet sinking into the soft sand. The sound of the waves crashing against the shore filled her ears. She stopped and looked out at the sea, feeling the gentle breeze on her face. Taking a deep breath, she closed her eyes and let the peacefulness of the moment wash over her.她沿着海滩慢慢地走着，双脚陷入柔软的沙子里。海浪拍打着海岸的声音充斥着她的耳朵。她停下来，望着大海，感受着微风拂过她的脸庞。深吸一口气，她闭上眼睛，让这一刻的宁静笼罩着她。
4.She climbed the mountain steadily, one step at a time. The air was thin and it was hard to breathe, but she kept going. When she reached the top, she looked out at the breathtaking view, feeling a sense of achievement. She sat down and rested for a while, enjoying the moment. Then, she carefully made her way back down the mountain.她稳步地爬山，一步一步地。空气稀薄，呼吸困难，但她继续前进。当她到达山顶时，她望着令人惊叹的景色，感到一种成就感。她坐下来休息了一会儿，享受着这一刻。然后，她小心翼翼地下山。